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From today,I will only blog in English or Japnaese 'cause my English writing sucks!and I wanna have more practice on Japanese. So,can anyone proofread the following writing for me?

Cosmetic surgery has become cheaper and more easily available. Many young women have the shape of their nose changed, or have their eyelids altered. Write a letter to your teenage friend, Pat, who is thinking of having cosmetic surgery. Point out some of the arguments for and against plastic surgery, and advise her on what she should do. Give reasons for your advice. Do not write any address. Sign your name ‘Chris Wong’.




 


Dear Pat,



I have heard that you are thinking of having cosmetic surgery. I know that having cosmetic surgery has long been common in Japan, Korea and the United States and this phenomenon is spreading to Hong Kong, which is influencing our values to beauty. Of cause, there are both advantages and disadvantages of having cosmetic surgery.


 


Apparently, it is easier to succeed in showbiz if you have a pretty face. Some surveys conducted have also shown that it is easier for good looking people to obtain achievement in career. Yes, it is kind of unfair but it is the truth. That’s why people want to become prettier by having cosmetic surgery. This can make their road ahead smoother. Besides, pretty face can always give people a good impression. Boys are always attracted to girls with pretty face, so are girls. After cosmetic surgery, you may have many boys running after you. You will also receive praise about your appearance from others. You may even have more friends, as you know, people like to make friends with pretty girls or handsome boys. But have you ever looked to the downside of cosmetic surgery?


 


There is always news about failures of cosmetic surgery. Cosmetic surgery is not granted with 100% success. Some women who had breast implant turned out that they need to take out the substance and had their breast reconstructed again. This is not only a waste of money, but also a great harm to one’s heart and health if the surgery fails. Or do you want a nose as Michael Jackson’s which will fall apart any time at any minute? Why do you have to take that risk if it is not surely success?


 


Moreover, cosmetic surgery is not widely accepted in Hong Kong. I am sure that you notice the response of people when they learn about the artists who have had cosmetic surgery from magazines. They always judge them with a disapproval tone, saying that “Oh yea, no wonder why her eyes are so big and so is her breast.” So what if your boy friend figures out that you have cosmetic surgery? Will he dump you? Will he despise you? Not only your boy friend, if others find out that you have cosmetic surgery, what will they think about you?


 


I think you should not change your face that your parents give you. Have you ever thought that after cosmetic surgery, you will not take after your parents anymore? It may hurt their hearts. And you know, grandparents are always conservative, they may feel unhappy about cosmetic surgery. If cosmetic surgery raises negative emotions of your loved ones, I do not think it would be sensible of you to have it. This may cause unnecessary quarrels with your family.


 


As you can see, disadvantages outweigh advantages. Therefore, you better not take the risk. You should instead build up confidence from developing your potential talents rather than form outer beauty, which is like flowers, that wither. If you have good personality, doing good deeds every day, I am sure that you will be very beautiful – from inner to outer, like Mother Teresa.


 


I hope you will make a wise choice.


                                                                                       Yours,


Chris Wong


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